Re: [WebDNA] [OT] WebDNA Wiki - need grammar check / suggestions
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texte = Brian Fries wrote:> Overall quite good. A few nitpicks......>> WebCatalog and Pacific Coast Software was purchased> > > "was" should be "were"There's no real need to include WebCatalog in that sentence at all. It goes without saying that when Smith Micro purchased the Pacific they also gained the rights to the software.---Stuart Tremain wrote: > I think it important to state that it can be used on Mac, Windows & > Linux servers.Yes, that's very important. The way the article is right now, one can easily get the impression WebDNA is still a Mac-only application. Perhaps it should even be included in the very first paragraph.---A couple of comments to this paragraph: From 2005 to 2008, for perhaps various reasons including the success of Smith Micro Software with other products, WebDNA users began to lose support from the owners and the language went into decline. WebDNA lost many of its users who then opted for more actively supported solutions. The fate of WebDNA was unknown during these years and it was ultimately the developers of WebDNA who revived the language."for perhaps various reasons" - should read "perhaps for various reasons" But I think it's better to leave the phrase out completely. It has no semantic content and the underlying meaning (which the readers may or may not catch) goes something like: "SmithMicro lost the plot but it wouldn't be polite to say that so we added a meaningless phrase here instead.""WebDNA users began to lose support from the owners" is a bit clumsy language but I'm not quite sure how to rephrase it."WebDNA lost many of its users who then opted for more actively supported solutions"I think this i better language:"WebDNA lost many of its users to more actively supported solutions""The fate of WebDNA was unknown" -> "The fate of WebDNA was uncertain"Frank Nordberghttp://www.musicaviva.comhttp://stores.ebay.com/Nordbergs-Music-Store?refid=store
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Brian Fries wrote:> Overall quite good. A few nitpicks......>> WebCatalog and Pacific Coast Software was purchased> > > "was" should be "were"There's no real need to include WebCatalog in that sentence at all. It goes without saying that when Smith Micro purchased the Pacific they also gained the rights to the software.---Stuart Tremain wrote: > I think it important to state that it can be used on Mac, Windows & > Linux servers.Yes, that's very important. The way the article is right now, one can easily get the impression WebDNA is still a Mac-only application. Perhaps it should even be included in the very first paragraph.---A couple of comments to this paragraph: From 2005 to 2008, for perhaps various reasons including the success of Smith Micro Software with other products, WebDNA users began to lose support from the owners and the language went into decline. WebDNA lost many of its users who then opted for more actively supported solutions. The fate of WebDNA was unknown during these years and it was ultimately the developers of WebDNA who revived the language."for perhaps various reasons" - should read "perhaps for various reasons" But I think it's better to leave the phrase out completely. It has no semantic content and the underlying meaning (which the readers may or may not catch) goes something like: "SmithMicro lost the plot but it wouldn't be polite to say that so we added a meaningless phrase here instead.""WebDNA users began to lose support from the owners" is a bit clumsy language but I'm not quite sure how to rephrase it."WebDNA lost many of its users who then opted for more actively supported solutions"I think this i better language:"WebDNA lost many of its users to more actively supported solutions""The fate of WebDNA was unknown" -> "The fate of WebDNA was uncertain"Frank Nordberghttp://www.musicaviva.comhttp://stores.ebay.com/Nordbergs-Music-Store?refid=store
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